好久没给学员改开发信了。今天花了一小时，逐字逐句分析用词和逻辑，也让我重新回顾了一下邮件的用词多样化，和段落分层逻辑。

所以我根据她的内容，重写了一封带毅冰风格的email出来。原文我就不贴了，把我改写的摘录过来，一些句型大家也可以拿来用。

用的字体是Optima，四段式写法，看起来就是这样的感觉，文字版请看下面👇

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Dear Michael,

Sorry to take you 1 minute to review this email. I think it will absolutely NOT waste your time.

Having surfed your official website for more than 1 hour, we found our power banks could be closely matched your items. We supply a majority of power banks ranged 4000 mAh to 20000 mAh to US market with UL approved.

Attached please find the offer sheet for our hot-selling portable solar bank for your reference. Should you have any further questions, kindly contact me at any time. 

Plus, free sample could be provided on request.

Best regards,

Sophie 

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当然，这只是mail group的第一封而已，后面还要结合更多内容，分层处理。

毅冰

2020.7.4